[IELTS] WRITING_task 1_the percentage of part-time workers

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Write at least 150 words.
The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Tips

Important Things:
Date - This will determine what tense of the verb will be used in the answer
Figures - percentage?proportion? What is the figure about? What is the percentage for?
What stands out?
Highest? Lowest? Differences? Similarities?
Categories

Basic Structure:
Intro (Paraphrase the heading) - 1 sentence
Overview (What stands out?) - 1-2 sentences
Detail Paragraph 1- 3-5 sentences Main Idea - Highest - Most Noticed?
Detail Paragraph 2 - 3-5 sentences Main Idea - Highest - Most Noticed?

 

Word count : 179 words

Intro
The bar chart provides information on the proportion of people who do a part-time job in four countries of the United Kingdom during a 30 years period.

 

The bar chart provides information on the proportion of people who do a part-time job in four countries of the United Kingdom for the years 1980 and 2010. during a 30 years period.

 

provide = illustrate; describe; display; 

people who do a part-time job = part time workers; part-timers; part time employees;

during a 30 years period : line graph 같이 기간이 쭉 이어져오는 그래프일 때 사용; 이런 bar graph에는 적절x

Overview
Overall, it is clear that all countries apart from Nothern Ireland increased the percentage of workers doing part-time job from 1980 to 2010. Wales had the highest percentage of part-time workers among the other countries during the two given periods.

 

Overall, it is clear that all countries apart from Nothern Ireland increased the percentage of workers doing part-time job in 1980 compared to 2010. from 1980 to 2010. Wales had the highest percentage of part-time workers among the other countries during the two given periods.

 

it is clear that : task 2에서 쓸 법한 문장의 시작. 쓰지말고 general하게 가자.

increasd : 그래프는 1980, 2010의 일, 과거 시제 사용

from 1980 to 2010 : 역시 duration의 표현, 적절x 

overview 는 1문장이어도 괜찮 (전체의 트렌드를 나타내는 문장), 뒤의 문장은 detail에서 써주자! 

Detail 1
In 1980, just upper than 30 percent of people worked for part-time in Wales. That figure increased until about 35 percent which was the highest percentage in 2010. At the first period, the figure for England was around 25 percent and its figure in 2010 increased up to similar as the figure for wales in 1980.

 

As can be seen, for both years, Wales had the highest percentage of part-time workers among the other countries.  In 1980, Just upper than over 30 percent of people worked for part-time in Wales. That figure increased until  to about 35 % percent after 30 years which was the highest percentage in 2010. Similarly, at the first period, the figure for England's part-time employees was around 25 percent a quarter and its figure in 2010 increased up to similar grew the same as the figure for wales in 1980.

 

 

Detail 2
Some people who do the part-time job in Northern Ireland accounted for approximately 15 percent in 1980, but there was a slightly decline from 15 percent to 12 percent during the given period. By contrast, in Scotland, a significant rise of the proportion of part time workers can be seen and it made up about 10 percent. 

 

Some people who do the part-time job Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that employees who work on a part-time basis in Northern Ireland were a bit lower in 2010 than 1980. In particular, it accounted for approximately 15 percent in 1980, but slightly declined from 15 % to 12 % in 2010. there was a slightly decline from 15 percent to 12 percent during the given period. By contrast, in Scotland, a significant rise of the proportion of part time workers can be seen and it made up about 10 percent. the figure in 2010 doubled compared to in 1980.

 

doubled - tripled; quadrupled;

 

By - subtracting
To - use the actual number
From - 2 figures comparison
With - using the actual numbers
The percentage of part-timers in Scotland increased by 10%.
The percentage of part-timers in Scotland increased to 20% in 2010.
The percentage of part-timers in Scotland increased from 10% in 1980 to 20% in 2010.
The percentage of part-timers in Scotland increased with 10% in 1980 and 20% in 2010.

When you are indicating information:
Detail 1:
According to the illustration
As can be seen
It is noticeable that

Detail 2:
Looking at the graph more closely/in more detail, one can see that
In particular
To be more specific

When you are indicating differences and similarities:
Similarly
It is interesting to note that...
It is apparently seen that... 
It is conspicuous that... 
It is explicitly observed that...
It is clear from the data... 
It is worth noticing that...

Proportions
70%- a large proportion 
71%- a significant majority 
15%- a small minority
3%- an insignificant minority

Fractions
73%- nearly three quarters 
51%- just over a half
49%- just under a half 
32%- nearly a third
3%- a tiny fraction
50%- exactly a half
26%- roughly one quarter 
49%- around a half
24%- almost a quarter 
77%- approximately three quarters
25% - a quarter

Here the vocabulary word lists include the
following:
Upward trend:
Increase/an increase 
Rise/ a rise
Grow/ a growth 
Climb/ a climb 
Go /up

Downward trend:
Drop/ a drop
Fall/ a fall
Decrease/ a decrease 
Decline/ a decline

Other Vocabulary:
Dip / a dip
Fluctuate /a fluctuation 
Remain stable
Remain steady
Level off
Remain unchanged 
Peak at (figure + year) -
highest -
Reach a peak of (figure + year) - highest
Hit a low of
Hit a high of Bottom out
Plateau
Bottomed - lowest point